This is the current start to my query email for Keep Out! and I'm after some opinions on how it sounds please?!
I am submitting my novel, Keep Out!, for your
consideration. The story is a realistic Middle Grade novel about a mixed race
family who are all racially bullied.Jools, Emma and Jason become inseparable friends.They go shopping for their CornerRidge
Secondary School uniforms together and while Zion (Jools’ older sister) passes
her uniform onto Emma to save money, Logan (Jools’ younger brother) throws a
strop about not getting anything out of the shopping trip, even though he
hasn’t grown out of his current uniform and he’ll be able to go on a shopping
trip of his own when he starts at CornerRidge in two years’ time too.
Keep Out! is a 50,000 word novel for
readers aged 9-12 and would appeal to those who have enjoyed Billionaire Boy by
David Walliams plus the angst of having a sibling as described in
Jacqueline Wilson’s Double Act.